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The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides data on
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the precentage
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precentage
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percentage
 of international travel
over
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from
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a
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apply
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1990 to 2005 The data
reaveals
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reveals
 a
historycal
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historical
 rise in
Europ
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European
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 travel
numbers
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 from 1990,
it
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when it
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 was 280.2
million
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to
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, to
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 2005 we can see a big increase
with
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, with
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traveling
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travelling
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 up to 400.2
million
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.
Next
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 there is the Middle East,
nothing
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where nothing
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 much
happend
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happened
 almost
slightly
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slight
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 increase
with
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in
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numbers
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like
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, like
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Africa
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Africa's
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precentage
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percentage
,
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. On
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 we have America to be the
seconed
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second
 of
high
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the highest
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numbers
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 in international travel, from
1990
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1990,
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starts
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starting
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 with 80.5
million
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to
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, to
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2005
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2005,
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ends
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ending
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 with 113.2
million
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.
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in
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 addition, the total
numbers
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 in 1990 were 448.9 and in 1995 it was 615.2
unlike
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. Unlike
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the 2000's
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2000's
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2000s
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 to
2005
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2005,
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 there is a big increase in total
numbers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • more
  • less
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • year
  • 1993
  • 2003
  • men
  • women
  • work
  • employment
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • gap
  • difference
  • compare
  • between
  • in
  • for
  • by
  • across
  • total
  • overall
  • higher
  • lower
  • these
  • tables
  • report
  • summarize
  • describe
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