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The pie charts show the percentages of different occupations held by males and females in Great Britain in 1992.

The pie charts show the percentages of different occupations held by males and females in Great Britain in 1992.
The three pie charts below demonstrate degrees granted in various disciplines at the National University each decade from 1980 to 2000.
It is clear that
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 Computer Science were far more popular among all 4 fields. The proportions of all three diagrams have changed over
decades
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the decades
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, but not significantly. The highest percentage was achieved in 2000 by Computer Science in comparison with Law disciplines, which took only
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 in 2000.
Furthermore
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, Law is considered as least demanded field at the National University since the figures fluctuated from 15% to 10%. If we take into account
Business
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Business,
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 we can notice the decrease by 10% every decade. Specifically, starting from
strong
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a strong
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 30 per cent in
1980
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1980,
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 the number of diplomas went
downward
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down
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 to
tiny
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a tiny
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 minority. Medicine was distinguished by the fact that, starting with an exact quarter, 20 years later, demand was still exactly a quarter.

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