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The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
linegraph
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line graph
 shows how much UK
river
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 water was accepted as having good chemical
quality
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 from 1990 to 2002.
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,
the
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Wales,
Notrhern
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Northern
 Ireland, England and Scotland experienced different trends in the period.
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Northern Ireland, England and Scotland rose significantly with some fluctuations, Wales fell over time. As
graph
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the graph
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 shows, the
Scotland percentage of
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percentage of Scotland's
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 good
quality
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river
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rivers
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 started at just over 20% in 1990,
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 it rose dramatically to 60 percent in 2000, followed by a final drop to 40% in 2002. Regarding the proportion of
river
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quality
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 in
England
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England,
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 it was just under 50% in 1990, after
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 rose sharply to 70% 1996,
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 figure decreased rapidly to 30% and
then
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incresed
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increased
 slightly to 50% in 2002.
Subsquently
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Subsequently
, the highest percentage of good
quality
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river
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rivers
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 in Northern Ireland
shows
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remain
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remained
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 stable in
1998
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1998,
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afterwoards
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after
 a small decline to 80 in 2001.
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contrast
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 the percentage of good
quality
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river
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rivers
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 in Wales was just over 90% in 1990
,
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;
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this
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 figure climbed slowly to 97% in 1998 and dropped sharply to
80
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80%
 in 2002.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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