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You recently stayed at a hotel during your vacation, but you were not satisfied with some of the services provided. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: explain when you stayed at the hotel describe the problems you experienced say what you would like the manager to do about it

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to
regard
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address
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 an issue that I faced in your hotel
,
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apply
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 when I stayed there for 2 nights. But I am not
satisfying
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satisfied
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for
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with
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 your room services. I am going to Lahore for my office meetings, and I often stay in your 'Sareena Hotel' because of
pleasant
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the pleasant
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ambiance
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ambience
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 and good facilities.
However
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, at
present
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present,
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that
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the
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 room where I stay, the AC was not functioning well, so I could not sleep properly. I called the maintenance department
but
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, but
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 they did not respond, and no one came
for fixed
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to fix
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this
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 problem. I would like to suggest that you should increase your staff
because of
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for
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convenience
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the convenience
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for
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of
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 your guests.
Moreover
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, they should immediately solve any problem. I hope you would consider my
complain
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. Your faithfully, Rabia Rizwan.

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Add exact dates and room name to relate when you stayed.
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Use clear English to restate the issue and to ask for a fix or refund.
structure
Use two small paragraphs: one for the problem and one for what you want the hotel to do.
content
The letter tells when you stayed and what the problem was.
tone
The tone is polite and shows what you want the hotel to do.
structure
You use a simple form and give details about the fault.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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