The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.
The two graphs demonstrate the proportion of industry sectors' input to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.
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, it is
crystall
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crystal
clear that
first
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the first
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chart
superior
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is superior
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in
agrculture
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agriculture
, leisure and hospitality, government,
while
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second
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the second
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graph
in
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is in
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construction, manufacturing, trade
utilities
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, utilities
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and transportation, finance
business
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, business
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and other.
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, both of them equally produced
healthcare
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and
education
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. Agriculture and
healthcare
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and
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, and
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education
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the
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are the
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most
preferd
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preferred
in
given
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the given
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charts, but construction, finance
business
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, business
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and
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, and
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other
indicated
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sectors indicated
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the lowest proportion. İn
2000
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2000,
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leads
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it led
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the way in
term
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terms
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of agriculture with 24% followed by
healthcare
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and
education
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and
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, and
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leisure and hospitality
which
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, which
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expend
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accounted for
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17%. 2016 tops the list for
healthcare
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and
education
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with 17% followed by trade, utilities and transportation
which
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, which
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expends
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accounts for
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16%. 2000 and 2016
expence
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experienced
the lowest ratio on
constuction
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construction
and finance business
and
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, and
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other
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others
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with 3% and 8%,
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accordingly
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respectively
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words healthcare, education with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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