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The chart below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare different groups of British
students
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 who could speak other
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language
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 alongside English at one university in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the largest proportion of
students
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were
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 interested in Spanish. Speaking Spanish as a second
language
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 was very common in both years. There were about 30% in 2000, and 35% in 2010. In 2000,
one fifth
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 of
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 did not choose other languages,
while
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this
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 figure reached 10% in 2010.
Moreover
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, selecting French as a second
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 was around 15% of the
students
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, which was equal to
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students
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 who
just
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spoke with another
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 in 2000.
In contrast
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, the number of
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students
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 with another
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 increased to 20% in 2010.
In addition
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, the percentage of
students
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 who were taught to speak German stayed unchanged.
Apart from
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this
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, the number of
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 with two other
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language
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 rose by about 5%. All in all,
it is clear that
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 Spanish was very popular among
students
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 in those years.

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