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In addition to your full-time job, you are taking a 15-hour Computer Science course. You now find that you cannot continue with the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter: -Describe your schedule and situation -Explain why you cannot continue the course -Say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows, Dear Ms. Franklin,

Dear Professor Shah, I am writing
this
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 email to inform you about the part-
time
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 course I am taking in computer science. I am unable to continue
further
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due to
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 excessive workload. I started
this
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 course in September 2025 as a distant learning. Since the evening
time
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 is relaxing for me
therefore
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 I chose the evening batch when I am mostly available to attend the lectures and online labs. Recently, I
am
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 promoted to the manager at my
work place
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.
As a result
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, I am handling a lot of projects under my supervision. In turn, I cannot manage my
time
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 effectively at both
the
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places at the same
time
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and
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 it
decreses
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decreases
 my productivity at both
the
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places significantly.
Therefore
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, I would
to
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like to discontinue from the current 15-hr Computer Science course so that I can make my work a principal focal point. Thank you for your
time
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 and consideration. Yours sincerely, Varun.

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coherence
Use three small parts: intro, reason, and end. It helps the flow.
coherence
Break long lines to short ones. This makes it easy to read.
language
Fix small errors in spelling and form, like 'I would to like' and 'decreases'.
task
Be clear on the action you want to take and the date. Say when you will stop the course.
content
You tell the tutor your reason and plan to stop.
tone
The tone is polite and shows respect.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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