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The charts below show the result of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the pawkey hotel they rated the hotels customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the result of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the pawkey hotel they rated the hotels customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The charts show the result of a questionnaire that asked visitors
the
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at the
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parkway
Fix capitalization
Parkway Hotel
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hotel
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 how they rated the
hotel
Use synonyms
's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. There are 5 types
Use synonyms
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of answer
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answer
Correct subject-verb agreement
answers
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 that customer
servise
Correct your spelling
service
 was given in 2005 and 2010. There are
;
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:
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 excellent, satisfactory, very poor, good, and poor. In
2005
Punctuation problem
2005,
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 satisfactory
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 the
most higher
Correct word choice
highest
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answer
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,
until
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at
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 45%. Poor is the second
higher
Correct word choice
highest
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 number in 2005, howeverbetween poor and good only
just
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apply
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have
diffrent
Correct your spelling
difference
7
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of 7
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%
answer
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. Next one
,
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apply
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 is very poor, different 1%, and the
last
Linking Words
 is excellent
the
Punctuation problem
, the
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 lowest number in 2005.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
that’s
Punctuation problem
, that’s
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 make
2005
Correct article usage
the 2005
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 Parkway
Hotel
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 have
a
Correct article usage
apply
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not good customer service. In
2010
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2010,
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satisfactory
Replace the word
satisfaction
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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decrease
Replace the word
decreased
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 from 45% to 39%,
is
Correct pronoun usage
which is
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 the third
higher
Correct word choice
highest
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 number in 2010
, the
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. The
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 first position is
good
Correct article usage
a good
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answer
Use synonyms
,
Punctuation problem
;
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 there is a good progress to Parkway
hotel
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,
Punctuation problem
. Secondly
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secondly
Linking Words
 is
excellent
Correct article usage
an excellent
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answer
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 in
second
Correct article usage
the second
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 space
, the
Punctuation problem
. The
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fouth
Use the right word
fourth
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 one is poor, and the
last
Linking Words
 one is very poor only 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, answer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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