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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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this
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This
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 chart delicate the
percntage
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percentage
 of
tim
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time
 working adults spent on different activities
ina
Use the right word
in a
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 particular country in 1958 and 2008.There is
an
Correct article usage
a
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 notable increase in working hours from 33% in 1958 to 42% in 2008.Other
interest
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interests
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 or playing sports remain relatively stable , with
slight
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a slight
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 increase from 6% to8%.
However
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, there is
an
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a
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 significant decrease in sleeping from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008.
Also
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, A marked reduction could be seen
on
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in
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 going out.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • increase
  • decrease
  • shift
  • balance
  • time
  • significant
  • household tasks
  • leisure
  • reflect
  • importance
  • education
  • personal development
  • stable
  • constant
  • development
  • focus
  • responsibilities
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