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The line graph below shows the fast food consumption in various regions around the world from 1980 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates how much fast food is consumed in diverse countries
in
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earth
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 between 1980 to 2022.
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, fish and chips significantly decreased during the period,
while
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 hamburgers and
pizza
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 substantially increased. In 1975,
pizza
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consumption
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 was the highest with
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number
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a number
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 of 100 . Hamburgers,
however
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,experienced the highest growth, which
rose
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increased
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 the
consumption
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 from around 10
,
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apply
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 to around 85 in 1985.
Pizza
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 started the period with the lowest
number
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with
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 around 5,and grew constantly to reach its peak,around 85, in 1995. In 2000,after it was the
first,
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fish and chips ended with the lowest
consumption
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, less than 40. Hamburgers
was
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 the highest with
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number
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a number
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 of 100.
Pizza
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which
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, which
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 had begun with the lowest
number
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, became the second with
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number
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a number
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 of
consumption
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 around 85.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, consumption, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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