The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the rate of unemployment
graduates
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among graduates
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in three countries, namely Spain,
Gemany
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Germany
, and Italy, between 1991 and 2005.
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, Spain and Germany showed a downward and an upward trend
respectively
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, respectively
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,
whereas
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Italy accounted for an increase in the early
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, but
then
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dipped gradually over time. In 1991, Spain began with 13%, and
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it soared to 18% just
two
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years
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later and
mantained
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maintained
the same for another
two
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years
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before continually declining to 11% in 2001,
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it levelled off for
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years
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and continued weakening to around 9% by 2005.
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, the rate of unemployment in
Gemany
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Germany
initiated
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with
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4% in 1991, after which it
built up
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rose
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to 7% in 1993 and remained unchanged in 1995 before rising to over 8% in the next
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years
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.
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, the number fell steadily to 6% in 2001 before recovering to nearly 12%
at the end
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of the period.
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, the unemployment rate in Italy started with 8% in 1991, and from
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on, it advanced gradually and reached a peak point at 12% in 1997
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.
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and
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apply
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at
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this
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point, it remained stable for another
two
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years
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.
However
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, the number edged down consistently to 8% in 2003 and stayed the same until the end of the time.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment
  • graduates
  • rate
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • over time
  • period
  • high
  • low
  • steady
  • stable
  • peak
  • dip
  • move
  • between
  • across
  • different
  • same
  • compare
  • country
  • Australia
  • Canada
  • Germany
  • Japan
  • economy
  • job
  • work
  • education
  • training
  • skill
  • reason
  • general
  • overall
  • by
  • toward
  • 2000
  • 2020
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