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The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.

The following chart gives information about the percentage of
exports
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 from Australia
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 four different countries between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, Australian
exports
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were
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decreased in two nations throughout the period.
While
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 the
exports
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 from
Asturalia
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Australia
 increased in
other
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the other
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 two countries. One of them
was
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reached a peak in the year.
To begin
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 with, the
exports
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 from
AUstiralia
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Australia
 were very popular in 1990 in Japan. The number stood at nearly 25
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percent
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.
Then
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 the proportion dropped slowly to under 20% in the first ten years . From 2010 to 2012, the percentage stayed at almost 18
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percent
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.
Similarly
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, the number of
exports
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 in
US
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the US
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begin
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 with approximately 11%. After that, there were fluctuations over
the the
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time. They reached the lowest point in
2012
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2012,
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 nearly 4
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percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
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, Australian
exports
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was
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 less
commmon
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common
 in China and India in 1990. There were only about ( 3%,2%). The
the
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rates climbed slightly for both
the
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countries. In 2005, the number started
reduced
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 gradually to almost 4
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percent
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per cent
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 in Ondia , but the percentage of products exported from Australia to China started to
picked
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 up sharply from 2008 to 2012. It reached the highest point at approximately 28
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percent
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 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • delineates
  • exports
  • nations
  • percentage
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analyze
  • increase
  • decrease
  • similarities
  • differences
  • economic implications
  • shifts
  • period
  • highlight
  • examine
  • rapid increase
  • overview
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