The pie charts show the average percentages of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar consumed in typical meals in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the
percentage
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of unhealthy
ingredients
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in typical meals (breakfast, lunch, dinner and
snacks
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)
eated
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eaten
in the USA.
Overall
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,
sodium
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and saturated fat
mostly
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are mostly
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consumed
in
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at
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dinner,
while
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added
sugar
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is eated
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eated
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eaten
in
snacks
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. In the breakfast
all
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, all
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three
ingredients
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the
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are the
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least used. All three
ingredients
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was
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were
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the least consumed
from
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, from
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14% to 16% in the breakfast.
In&nbsp
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In
;
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apply
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lunch
the
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, the
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percentage
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of
the
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apply
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sodium
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and
satured
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saturated
fat was at
the
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a
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similar level
from
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, from
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26% to 29%,
while
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added
sugar
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was 19%.
In
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At
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the
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apply
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dinner
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dinner,
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the most consumed
ingredients
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were
sodium
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and saturated fat
with
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, with
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43% and 37%, respectively. Meanwhile, the
percentage
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of added
sugar
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was 23%. In the
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snacks
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snacks,
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the
percentage
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of
sodium
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(14%) and saturated fat (21%)
were
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was
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the smallest. Added
sugar
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in the
snacks
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was the
mostly
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most
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used product with 42%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, ingredients, snacks, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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