The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

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the
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of New Zealand on export products from Oceania and Asia between 1994 - 2004.
Overall
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, New Zealand required
suppies
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supplies
from Australia with an average value
by
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NZ
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$5000 -
NZ
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$6000.
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,
Japan
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import product was two times lower and declined until
NZ
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$2000.
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countries had significant
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in 1996 and 2000.
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, if we take a look
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detail
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, Australian suppliers had a
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performance compared to Japan
and
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It
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rose dramatically in 2004 by
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NZ$ 8000
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NZ$8000
.
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the Nippon declined significantly in 2004
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4 times than its opponent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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