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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not buy the items listed. • Say what you would like the bank to do to fix the problem.

Dear Branch
manager
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Manager
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, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I suspect some suspicious transactions
going
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are going
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 on through my credit
card
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. I am a golden visa cardholder of your
reputated
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reputable
 bank with an account number 589256.
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, I have been using
this
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card
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from
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for
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 the
last
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 5 years, and never experienced
such
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 a problem before. On Sunday afternoon, I received a notification stating that I made multiple purchases in a
luxuary
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luxury
 clothing store;
however
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, I did not
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use
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 my
card
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 to buy that stuff.
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, I assume someone might be using my
card
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 details. I would request
you that
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that you
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 please block my
card
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 and cancel those transactions. Kindly
,
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apply
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 reset my account as soon as possible because I am worried that my
card
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 could be used again to buy more stuff. I am looking forward to your prompt reply. Thank you for your time and consideration! Yours faithfully, Reem Sheikh

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improvement
Use a clear order: intro, what happened, what you want, close.
error correction
Fix grammar errors like 'reputated' and 'luxury' and use correct forms.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea only.
content
Add more detail on what the bank should do and how you can be reached.
tone
Keep a formal tone and proper salutaion and closing.
strength
The letter states the problem and asks for action.
strength
The tone is formal and respectful.
strength
It gives the name and number of the account.
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