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The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Pie
Correct article usage
The pie
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chart
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 illustrates
a
Correct article usage
the
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 number of males and females who are arrested in the UK between 2015 and
2020
Punctuation problem
2020,
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while
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bar
Correct article usage
the bar
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chart
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 shows several reasons that
become
Verb problem
contribute
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 to
this
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 condition . It is evident that the highest
level
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 is males who
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 arrested compared to females .When it comes to
bar
Correct article usage
the bar
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chart
Punctuation problem
chart,
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 the smallest
percentage
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 is theft
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while
Punctuation problem
, while
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 the
more
Correct word choice
largest
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 one is public intoxication. We can see from
data
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the data
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 that
arrested
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the arrest
level
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reachs
Correct your spelling
reaches
 22
percentage
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 and
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 arrested consist of 68
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
 in males over 5 years . The pattern is a complete reverse when it comes to
second
Correct article usage
the second
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 pie
chart
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includes
Correct pronoun usage
, which includes
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 almost all
percentage
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 is next arrested
besides
Linking Words
 9
percentage
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 which is arrested. From the bar
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chart
Add a comma
chart,
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 it can be seen that
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percentage
Correct article usage
the percentage
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 of drink driving in men
about
Verb problem
is about
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 22
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
while
Linking Words
women
Change preposition
in women
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is
Correct pronoun usage
it is
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 15
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
.The highest
level
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 is both
woman
Fix the agreement mistake
women
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 and men is public intoxication.
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level
Correct article usage
The level
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 of
Breaking
Fix capitalization
breaking
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 or entering and theft is equal
that
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to that
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become
Change preposition
of
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 men
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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this
Linking Words
level
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growth
Replace the word
grows
 in assault and others too in equally
speed
Correct word choice
fast speed
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, level, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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