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he graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph compares the number of people in
China
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 and
India
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, from 2000,
along with
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untill
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until
 2050
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, the
population
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 figures of
the
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both counties exhibited
upward
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an upward
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 trend throughout the period
,
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.
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Furthermore
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,
relatively,
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India
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showing
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is showing
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 a significant increase
and
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, and
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China
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 is showing a moderate growth in
population
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. During the first half of the timeframe,
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population
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the population
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 in
China
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 recorded higher than in
India
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 and is expected to continue up untill the expected number is similar in both countries in 2030, which is around1.45 bilion.
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, in 2000, the difference between
both
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 categories remained high,
while
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China
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recording
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recorded
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 the higher
population
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 figure.
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,
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in
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2050
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2050,
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the expected
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India's population is expected to be
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India
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's
population
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 is higher than
in
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China
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China's
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, predicted to reach nearly 1.6 billion. The
population
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 figure in
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china
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China
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,
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 peaked at around 2025 and
expected
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is expected
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 to maintain that
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level for
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 a decade before expected to be decreased gradually
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decreasing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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