The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph presents the
protion
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proportion
of travellers to England who visited four different spots in Brighton
between
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a 30-years peiod from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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,
Pavillion
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Pavilion
becomes the most popular
attractions
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attraction
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in Brighton follow by Festival, Pier and
Art
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Gallery
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. The
propotion
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proportion
of Pavillion rose
steady
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steadily
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from 25% in 1890 and 30 % in 2010 after
hiting
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hitting
the peak of almost half of tourists in 1995.
Art
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Gallery
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came third in 1980 at almost 20%, but the position
replaced
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was replaced
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by Pier in 2005
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Art
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Gallery
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became the
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last
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least
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popular spot
of
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a
sharply
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drop 8% in 2010. After
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Art
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the Art
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Gallery
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hit the peak of almost 40% in 1895
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it
facing
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a
disceased
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decline
between 1990 and 2010. The percentage of tourists visited Festival rose steady 30% in1890 and 30% in 2010
To sum up
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Pavillion
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Pavilions
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are the most famous attractions in the future.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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