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You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel . Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangement. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel .

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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, Hope you are doing well,
i
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I
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 am writing
this
Linking Words
 letter to inform you that
me and my family
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my family and I
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 are planning to
come in
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stay at
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 your
hotel
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 on forthcoming weekend.
i
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I
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 read some reviews on google and
i
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I
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 really like
you
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your
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hotel
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 and your recommended services. I am
raj
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Raj
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, we will
check-in
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check
 in
your
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at your
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hotel
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 on 20
june
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June
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 2026
and
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, and
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 we will
check-out
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check out
 on 22
june
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June
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 2026.
we
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We
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 will be there at
5'o clock
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5 o'clock
 in the evening as
i
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I
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 mentioned
date
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apply
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.
i
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I
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 would like to request
you
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apply
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that if it is
possible
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possible,
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 could you please allot us a seaside room which has
balcony
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a balcony
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 for fresh air and look a exellent view of
outside
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the outside
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.
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Although, please
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Please
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 share with me the full cost of
room
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the room
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 with taxes.
Morover
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Moreover
, could you please share some
fasinating
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fascinating
 places
which is
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that are
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 near
to
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apply
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your
hotel
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 for tourists. where we could do some activities
and
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, and
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 if you have something interesting in your
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hotel
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hotel,
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 please let me know. Thank you so much in advance.
your
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Yours
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 sincerely, xyz.

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a clear ask for the price for all your family, not only one room.
task response
Task response: Use a more polite and clear tone, for example 'I would like to ask' and 'Could you please tell me'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each part: trip time, room needs, price, and things to do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with easy words like 'also', 'and', 'because', and 'please'.
task response
Task response: You give the arrival and leaving dates clearly.
task response
Task response: You ask about rooms, price, and places near the hotel.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are mostly easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • seaside hotel
  • weekend getaway
  • arrangements
  • arrival
  • departure
  • double room
  • family suite
  • cost breakdown
  • amenities
  • places of interest
  • tourist attractions
  • local cuisine
  • childcare services
  • itinerary
  • reservation
  • local excursions
  • leisure activities
  • promotional offers
  • price quotation
  • sea view
  • recreational facilities
  • proximity
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