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The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport. The pia chart comparisons the precentage of three alments on diets carbohydrates , protein and fat on three group of people eat Average diet, healthy diet and healthy diet for sport . Overall, The carbohydrates take the a high rate of ate in deit from the three group of people ,while the fat is the lowst rate . In, Healthy diet for sport it is the high score we prefer to eating carbohydrates 60% from total of ate than the portein 25% , the lowest rate is the fat 15% On the other hand the healthy diet with out sport berevered 50% for carb than protein for 30% and small amounts of fat 20% The average diet for normal people is take equale carbohydrates and protein around 80% from total of precentege and final the fat take the 20%.

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The
pia
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pie
 chart
comparisons
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compares
 the
precentage
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percentage
 of three
alments
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elements
 on diets
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carbohydrates
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: carbohydrates
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 , protein and fat on three
group
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groups
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 of people eat Average
diet
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, healthy
diet
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 and healthy
diet
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 for sport .
Overall
Linking Words
,
The
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the
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carbohydrates
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 take the
a high
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highest
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 rate of
ate
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intake
 in
deit
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diet
 from the three
group
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groups
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 of people ,
while
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 the fat is the
lowst
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lowest
 rate . In
,
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apply
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Healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 for sport it is the high score
we
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, we
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 prefer to
eating
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eat
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carbohydrates
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 60% from total of ate than the portein 25% , the lowest rate is
the
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apply
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fat 15%
On the other
Linking Words
hand
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hand,
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 the healthy
diet
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with out
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without
 sport berevered 50% for carb than protein for 30%
and
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, and
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 small amounts of fat 20% The average
diet
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 for normal people is take equale
carbohydrates
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 and protein
around
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, around
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 80% from
total
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the total
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 of precentege and final the fat take the 20%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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