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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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A glance at the graphs gives information on New Zealand import figures from
Japan
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 and
Australia
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 from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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Importations
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 from
Australia
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 steadily rose ;
however
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, those from
Japan
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 dramatically decreased over the decade .
According to
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 the data,
importations
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 from
Australia
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 , which were just under 4000
million
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NZD
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 in 1994 fluctuated a little after 5 years before dramatically climbing to almost 7500
million
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NZD
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 in 1 year and reaching an even greater position in 2004.
Whereas
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importations
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 from
Japan
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 that were only 3000
million
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NZD
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 at the beginning, peaked twice , to just over 6000
million
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NZD
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 , its highest point, and to 6000
million
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NZD
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 in 1997 and 2000, respectively, before decreasing to a lower position ( 2000
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NZD
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 ) in 2001 and remained stable over the next 3 years.
Moreover
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,
importations
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 from both countries rose over the years with some peaks , but
Japan
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's imports, which were around 6000
million
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NZD
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, have never reached
Australia
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's imports, which were from 6500- 8,000
million
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NZD
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 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, australia, importations, million, nzd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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