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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050.

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The line graph depicts
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population
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the population
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number
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numbers
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 for India and
China
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 since 2000 and
predicted
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the predicted
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number of
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population numbers
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population
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 until 2050.Units are measured in billions.
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, the
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number of
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population
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in
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 India had the slowest
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number of
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growth
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people
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 but the highest increase.The figure for
China
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 was the highest proportion of
people
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in begining
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at the beginning
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 of
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the graph
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,
while
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also
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 the
population
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 in the country had increased. Looking at
China
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 in the country was
for
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1.250
billions
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billion
people
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 in 2000.Regarding predictions,
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population
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the population
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 in
China
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 will grow
up
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apply
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to 1.4 millions in 2050. Looking at India, the figure for
population
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 in
this
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 country was for 1 billion in 2000,
while
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 increased in 2020, accounting for 1.3 billion.
It is clear that
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,
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apply
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shows
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show
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 that
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population
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the population
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 will be
for
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apply
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1.6
billions
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billion
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 in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, number, china, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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