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Band 5.5

You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasions, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter -give details of your visit to the restaurant -explain the reason for the celebration -say what was good about the food and the service

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Dear Manager, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
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 letter to appreciate all the services
,
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apply
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 that
has
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have
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 been provided to us
,
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at your restaurant
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 on my birthday party at you restaurent. I visited with my friends on June 15, and booked
celebration
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the celebration
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 room . It was my 25th birthday celebration
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 am glad i had celebrated at your wonderful restaurant.The Food was amazing , as one of your
manager
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managers
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 suggested
us
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to us
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 the Special Italian cuisine. It was delecious and
also
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 the way it was served was so amazing.
Moreover
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, the level of hygiene, taste of food and the presentation
was
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were
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 excellent . The best part of my celebration was the big
complementary
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complimentary
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 birthday cake with a
bouqet
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bouquet
 of flowers. Your staff is professional, cooperative and humble. I would love to thank you for making my day so special. In
fact
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 in future,
i
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I
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 would love to recommend my friends your restaurant. Kind regards, Raj

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task response
Give a little more detail about the meal, such as the name of a dish or how the staff helped your group. This will make your thanks more clear.
task response
Check small word forms and spelling, for example “your restaurant”, “restaurant”, “delicious”, and “bouquet”.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Use shorter sentences and full stops to make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Keep capital letters the same: write “I” and “food” with the right form. Also leave one space after commas and full stops.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending are polite. In the first paragraph, write “I am writing to thank you” rather than “appreciate all the services” for a more natural start.
task response
You cover all the main points: the visit, the birthday, and the good food and service.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, a main part, and a polite ending. The ideas are easy to follow.
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