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The charts below show the main causes of agricultural land degradation worldwide during the 1990s and the percentage of land degraded by different causes in three regions: Europe, Oceania and North America. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.### Worldwide * Over-grazing: **35%** * Deforestation: **30%** * Over-cultivation: **28%** * Other causes: **7%** ### Europe * Deforestation: **9.8%** * Over-cultivation: **7.7%** * Over-grazing: **5.5%** * Total degraded land: **23%** ### Oceania * Over-grazing: **11.3%** * Deforestation: **1.7%** * Over-cultivation: **0%** * Total degraded land: **13%** ### North America * Over-cultivation: **3.3%** * Over-grazing: **1.5%** * Deforestation: **0.2%** * Total degraded land: **5%**

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The charts below show the main causes of agricultural land degradation worldwide during the 1990s and the percentage of land degraded by different causes in three regions: Europe, Oceania and North America. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.### Worldwide * Over-grazing: **35%** * Deforestation: **30%** * Over-cultivation: **28%** * Other causes: **7%** ### Europe * Deforestation: **9.8%** * Over-cultivation: **7.7%** * Over-grazing: **5.5%** * Total degraded land: **23%** ### Oceania * Over-grazing: **11.3%** * Deforestation: **1.7%** * Over-cultivation: **0%** * Total degraded land: **13%** ### North America * Over-cultivation: **3.3%** * Over-grazing: **1.5%** * Deforestation: **0.2%** * Total degraded land: **5%**
The bar charts compare the global causes of soil infertility with the single
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 ones throughout the nineties of the
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 century.
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, it is possible to state that overgrazing accounts for the main
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degradation
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, amounting to 35%, followed by deforestation, standing at 30%, overcultivation, peaking at 28% and, ultimately, by other causes,
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 amount to only 7%.
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 it is possible to notice how each of them is characterised by a different trend. On the one hand, deforestation, which accounts for the principal
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 of soil infertility in
Europe
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, with a share amounting to 9.8%, in
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 only hits a 0.9
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 reaches its lowest at 0.5%.
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degradation
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, peaking at 11.3%, accounts for only a minimal
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, with 2.3%, and in North
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 as well, with a 0.7
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over cultivation
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over-cultivation
, whose share peaks at 7.7 % in
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 and amounts to 3.3% in North
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 , in
Oceania
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 only hits a 0.7
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. Ultimately, the other causes of
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degradation
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 among the countries account for the smallest percentages, hitting 3.2% in
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, 0.5% in North
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 and only 0.1% in
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, as overgrazing represents the principal
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 of
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degradation
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 globally, it
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 an important
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 among the single regions, accounting for the main one in
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, deforestation represents the most important reason
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 soil infertility in
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 and overcultivation in North
America
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cause, land, degradation, europe, oceania, percentage, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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