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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the
the
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extraction of three different products from
forest
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the forest
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 industry between 1980
to
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and
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 2000 in
European
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a European
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 country.
Overall
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, there is an upward trend in the
production
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 of timber and
paper
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 over the
years
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 as the growth
decrease
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decreases
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 slightly in
next
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the next
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 two
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years
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years,
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while
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 there is a steady rise in the making of pulp by the forest resources. In detail, timber
production
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 rates
was
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were
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 6 in 1980 as the figure
surge
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surged
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 remarkably in 1985
around to
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to around
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 9
number
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and
then
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 gradually
decline
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declined
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 in
upcoming
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the following
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years
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 and stood at 7 in 1995.
However
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,
paper
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production
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 was 3 times in 1980 as demand continued to increase significantly in the consecutive
years
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 and
hit at
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reached
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 10 times in 2000. As for pulp,
production
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 rate was 4
time
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times
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 in 1980 and
go
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went
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 down slightly in 1985 and
then
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 experienced a steady rise in 1995 about to 5 times.
Moreover
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,
paper
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production
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 outraced
paper
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 in 1990 as the demand in
market
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the market
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climb
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climbed
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 intensively.
Whereas
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, there is a slight difference in the
production
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 of timber and pulp in 2000 as compared to previous
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, paper, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production trends
  • output
  • timber
  • pulp
  • paper
  • gradually declining
  • depletion of resources
  • industrial focus
  • significant increase
  • growing demand
  • raw material
  • steady rise
  • stable market
  • finished products
  • consumer needs
  • surpassed
  • shift in priorities
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
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