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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
The line graphs present the level of imports in New Zealand from Australia and
Japan
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 from 1994 to 2004 in
million
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 dollars.
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, Australia was a bigger exporter than
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japan
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Japan
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, even though it experienced dramatic fluctuation throughout the period.
Japan
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also
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 went
though
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through
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 variations during
this
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 decade, reaching its highest levels in
late
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the late
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 90s and
then
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 again in
2000s
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the 2000s
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, before declining sharply. Imports from Australia stood at around
NZ
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 $4000
million
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 in 1994 and rose sharply to
NZ
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 $6500
million
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 in 1996. The number fell considerably to
NZ
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 $3000
million
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 in 1999.
Ater
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After
 which the import rebounded and reached about
NZ
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 $7500
million
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.After falling to about
NZ
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 $5000
million
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 in 2002, it rose again fininshing the period at
NZ
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 $8000
million
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 in 2004. By
contrats
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contrast
, imports from
Japan
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 started at
NZ
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 $3000
million
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, after which
it
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they
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 kept rising steadily
reaching
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, reaching
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 over
NZ
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 $6000
million
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 in 1997. They
then
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 declined just above
NZ
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 $4000
million
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 in 1999 before it reached
NZ
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 $6000 milllion in 2000. From that point onward,
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however
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however,
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 the trend was consistently downwards: exports
felll
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fell
 sharply to
NZ
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 $3000
million
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 in 2001 and continued to decline
ending
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, ending
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 the period at
record
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a record
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 low of
NZ
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 $2000
million
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 in 20024.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, million, nz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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