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The table below shows data on five popular languages in terms of their average monthly online course fees, the total number of global learners, and the growth in learner numbers over the last two years.

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The table provides information on five popular online
language
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 learning statistics in 2023, that’s includes
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, Spanish,
Mandarin
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Chinese
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, French, and
Japanese
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,
precented
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presents
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 the monthly
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courses
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course
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 fees in
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USD
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)
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apply
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, and the total
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rate
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number
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 of global
learners
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with
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and
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 the
growth
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 in learning
number
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numbers
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 over the
last
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 two years.
Overall
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,
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English
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the English
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language
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 experienced a high
rate
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 among global online
learners
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,
while
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Japanese
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the Japanese
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language
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 showed
modest
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a modest
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rate
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 throughout the period.
Mandarin
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Chinese
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 was the
most
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fastest-growing
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growth
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language
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 in learning over the
last
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 two years, unlike
French
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the French
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language
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recorded
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, which recorded
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 the least
growth
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 percentage. The average monthly online
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courses
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course
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 fees in 2023
,
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 were between 35 (
USD
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) and 70 (
USD
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), from the cheapest online
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 class to the
expensive
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most expensive
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 one
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 The list begins with
English
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language
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language,
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 that
coast
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 only 35 (
USD
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),
while
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 global online
learner
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learners
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 were about 1500 (
Millions
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). Spanish
language
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courses
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coast
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cost
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 40 (
USD
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) with 580 (
Millions
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)
learners
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. French online classes
coast
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 50 (
USD
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) with 300 (
Millions
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) global
learners
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, following that
Mandarin
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Chinese
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language
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coast
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 65 (
USD
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) and the global learner
rate
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 110 (
Millions
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),
finally
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 the most expensive fee for online
courses
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 is
Japanese
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language
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 with 70 (
USD
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),
although
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 the online course expenses too high, global
learners
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rate
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 were the least among all languages with 85 (
Millions
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)
learners
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. The
growth
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 in learner numbers over the
last
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 two years shows significant changes between all languages.
Moreover
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,
started from
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apply
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the
most learning
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highest learning growth
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growth
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 high percentage
,
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started from
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Mandarin
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Chinese
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 with +25%, Spanish +18%,
Japanese
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 +15%,
English
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 +12%,
French
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and French
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 +8%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, english, mandarin, chinese, japanese, courses, usd, rate, learners, growth, coast, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 5 times.
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