Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

Gender inequality in
work place
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the workplace
workplace
has been a matter of concern over the past few decades. Especially when it comes to a firm’s leadership. While some people believe that companies must be required by law to reserve some seats in their boards to be filled by women, some others doubt that
this
is going to be the to the best benefit of women or the companies. In the sequel, I will reiterate some of the main arguments that each of those
groups propose
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groups, proposes
groups proposes
, and I will explain why I tend to lean towards the latter. Women right advocates are the most vocal supporters of the idea that governments should mandate on businesses to hire more women in higher ranks. They argue that without
such
mandate, male decision makers in the market are set to linger on their
patriarchic
inspired by love for your country
patriotic
favor
feelings of great warmth and intensity
fervour
for male coworkers. Several gender equality surveys have been carried out lately and they all suggest that there are far too few women of higher ranks in companies than men.
However
, some economists and
business
owners point that even though the statistics hint on a huge gender gap in management positions, they
also
show that the gap has been shrinking steadily for the past several years. Suggesting that qualified women are increasingly finding their way into
business
leadership with the existing
business
dynamics. To force companies to put unqualified women in their boards risks hurting the image of a female leader and will not be beneficial to women in the long run. To conclude, while I agree
on
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with
the general idea that women need some level of government support to close the gender gap in
business
leadership, I do not think that forcing companies to put more women
in
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on
the board is the most effective way to achieve that. Governments have much better means, like tax exemptions, in their toolbox that, if properly used, could provide
much more sustainable remedy
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a much more sustainable remedy
for
this
problem.

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