Many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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In many countries
now the workforce
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now in the workforce
consists of more women than men. Yet, there are few women in managerial positions.
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, some people argue that a certain number of senior level positions should be reserved for women. In my opinion,
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is not a viable solution because it will benefit neither women nor the organizations hiring them. Reserving jobs on the basis of
gender
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benefits none. It will ensure that women can easily climb up the corporate ladder because there are positions reserved for them. Unfortunately,
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will discourage them from achieving higher education or working hard.
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,
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of reserving seats for women, girls should be taught from an early age that they too can become a manager or a CEO if they wish because the opportunities are there regardless of their genders.
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, imposing a quota will only encourage companies to find another way to outsmart the system.
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, a
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can change the title of a position to just fill a vacancy. For these reasons, women are not benefited when jobs / positions are reserved for them at the workplace.
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, it is important for the
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to be able to employ the best available candidate for the positions. When there are no
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based quotas, it will ensure that the most talented people get to the top.
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, companies that hire the best people for the right positions tend to be more successful.
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in turn will create more opportunities available within the
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and
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the
company
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can hire more
people including
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people, including
women to fill the additional available positions.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
is evident that reserving managerial positions for women is not the right solution to ensure
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equality
at
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in
the workplace. In conclusion, since forcing companies to hire more women just to follow the law can only cause more harm than good, I strongly believe that companies should be able to hire people based on their qualifications, and not
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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