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The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in economic industrial sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.

The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in economic industrial sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
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The line chart illustrates the labour force
employment
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 in economic industrial
sectors
 during the period from 1930 to 2010 in
USA
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the USA
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. These five economic
sectors
 include
industrial
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the industrial
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sector
, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting
,
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 technical
sector
, and other services.
The employment
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Employment
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 in the
sector
 of farming, fishing and foresting played a less significant role during
this
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these
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 30 years. It had the highest percentage at the beginning, close to 80% in 1930,
then
 gradually dropped to 60% in 1970, and after that, dramatically fell close to 1%
in
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 the end of the period.  Before 1970,  the employment of three
sectors
 ( technical, sales and office, and  industrial) presented with zig-zag trends, sitting between 0 to 15%. After 1970, the figure
of
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 these
sectors
 presented upward trends.
Industrial
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sector
 had a sharp increase until 2000 and
then
 flatted out close to 40%, the highest percentage among
the
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all
sectors
 in 2010. So did
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the sale
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sale
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sales
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 and office
sector
, but with
low
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a low
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 increase rate, about 35% in 2010, the
third
 highest figure. The technical
sector
 presented a sharp increase in the
last
 30 years with about 35% in 2020.  The
sector
 of other services increased at the beginning and peaked in 1940
with
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 about 15%. Since
then
, it decreased gradually to about 10% in 1970 and flatted out until the end of the period. Allover,
agricultural
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the agricultural
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sector
 has played a less significant role in
USA
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the USA
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 workforce market since 1930 and the two
sectors
 (industrial and technical) have become more important daily
with
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occupying about 30% individually.
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