The two figures bellow show the rate of criminal conviction among men and women of different age in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system.

The two pictures give information about how many men and women are arrested and compared the bonus of all convictions by age and gender. Overall, as can be seen from the pictures the a lot of crimes is happened by male than female. The proportion of all convictions is very high among the men.
However
, the female is very less in
this
position. If we look at the given information, we can see the male inmates are considerably high about 96
percent
cent
in prison. It is clear that the crimes are happening 2
percent
cent
of men at the age of 10.
Subsequently
,
this
index grows rapidly 16 per
cent
by 20.
Then
this
rate goes down gradually 8 per
cent
by 40. Interestingly,
this
rate stands steady between 40 and 45 ages. After that,
this
index falls significantly 2 per
cent
by 60.
On the other hand
, we can see the female inmates are very less than male in the UK. Their rates are only 4 per
cent
. The crimes are happening 0
percent
cent
of females at the age of 10. Yet,
this
index increase slightly approximately 4.5 per
cent
by 20. And
then
,
this
interest remains steady 4
percent
cent
between 25-30 and
this
rates decrease marginally about 0.5 per
cent
by 45. And
also
this
position stands steady by 55. Following
this
, the chunk of criminals falls 0 per
cent
by 60.
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