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The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
linegraph
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line graph
line graphs
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the past, current and projected
population
 of the two
countries
 which are
China
 and
India
 between 1990 and 2050.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that there is
and
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an
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 upward trend for
both
countries
. The dotted line
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the trend of
China
while
 the solid line
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 the
population
 of
India
. In 1990, the
population
 of
India
 were about 0.85
billions
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billion
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of
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people
whereas
 there was a huge
diffrent
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difference
different
 from
China
 with more than 1.1
billions
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billion
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of
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people. In the next years, the
population
 of
both
China
 and
India
 increased
steady
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steadily
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. In 2020, the inhabitants of
both
the
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apply
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countries
has
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had
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 a small difference,
China
were
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had
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 1.4
billions
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billion
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 and
India
were
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had
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 1.3
billions
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billion
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 of people. The two lines describe the
population
 of
both
 the
countries
 intersect each other in 20330 which
remained
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means
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 that the
population
 will be the same
this
 year. It is projected that
China
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China's
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population
 will start declining after 2030
while
India
 will continue to increase and will reach
to
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apply
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1.6 million in 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, china, india, both, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • projected population growth
  • line graph
  • milestones
  • projections
  • plateau
  • decline
  • rate of growth
  • peak
  • surpass
  • crossover
  • period
  • trend analysis
  • comparative analysis
  • significantly
  • eventually
  • illustrates
  • specific period
  • trends
  • summarizes
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