The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These charts show us
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the
data about
british
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British
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students
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of
an
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a
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university in England speaking
languages
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other than
Engliah
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English
in
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the year
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year
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2000 and in 2010. As we can see that majority of
students
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speak at least one extra
language
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other than
english
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English
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,
while
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some
students
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even speak two other
languages
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. In the
year
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20
percent
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per cent
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of
students
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were only using
english
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English
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whereas
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in the
year
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2010
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,2010
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this
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percentage fell way down to 10%. If we talk about
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year
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the year
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2000, most of the
students
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were able to speak
spanish
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Spanish
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, which is about 30% followed by german and another
language
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at 15%. But in 2010 Spanish speakers rose to 35%
along with
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another
language
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which experienced an increase of 5%
while
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German remained at 15%. The
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students
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number of students
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speaking two other
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also
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increased
about
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by about
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5% in 10 years. The
languages
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like German and French both are at 10% in 2010
along with
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students
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speaking no other
language
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.
Overall
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it can be concluded that as time is passing by
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are becoming
more keen
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to learn
languages
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, languages, year, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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