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Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

In the modern world, many companies prefer to choose their staff by conducting interviews. I personally believe
this
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 method
suites
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 only some categories
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, and
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 there are other
different
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apply
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ways to find a suitable fit for job positions. Throughout
this
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 essay, I will explain it in detail.
To begin
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 with, it is appropriate for some duties to select candidates via meetings because
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they
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required
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require
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 basic knowledge. To explain more, data entry jobs or graphic designers can be selected via interviews. To complete these types of
task
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tasks
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you
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, you
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 need to know
basics
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basic
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 information. For example, my sister got the data entry work as soon as she finished her studies because she had the required qualifications.
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, for some positions,it is acceptable to do
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 before offering
the
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apply
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employments
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employment
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.
However
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, there are other ways to
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someone
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someone's
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 skills
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such
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, such
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 as offering some trial sessions. During one-on-one or group
meetings
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meetings,
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 you can only find out
someones
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someone's
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 limited capability. To explain more, it is hard to find their skills through a meeting. The candidate may have all the study qualifications
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, but
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 she/he would not be the right fit.
For instance
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, a friend of mine applied for
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a duty
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 manager position in a supermarket who had experience as a team leader in a duty-free shop. But hiring managers decided to offer him a trainee period to see whether he is going to fit in
that
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with that
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 group.He got through it
and
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 now he is one of the head managers in the supermarket group.
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, offering
some
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a
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 trial period is one of the better alternatives for interviews because you can notice what they are really capable of.
To sum up
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, conference and one-on-one evaluations
good
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are good
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 for some work categories. But my personal point of view is
it
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that it
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 is always better to offer them some
trail
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trial
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 sessions to figure
people's
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out people's
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capability
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capabilities
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.

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language
Fix spelling and word use. For example: 'suites' should be 'suits', 'conference' is not a good word for job talk, 'trail' should be 'trial'. 'someones' should be 'someone's'.
structure
Make a plan. Start with a short view, then two clear body ideas with a simple example, then a short end.
content
Give more ways to pick staff, like tests, work tasks, group work, and checks. Compare them with interviews to show more balance.
structure
Use short and clear sentences. Keep to one idea in each paragraph. Use 'first', 'next', 'finally' to show order.
language
Try to keep the idea simple and connect them with easy words. This can help the reader see your point fast.
content
The author states a clear view that not all jobs fit an interview.
content
There is an example of a trainee period that supports the view.
structure
The piece ends with a simple idea that trial work can help find fit.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • job interview
  • candidates
  • employers
  • communication skills
  • confidence
  • cultural fit
  • application materials
  • subjective
  • bias
  • skills assessments
  • practical tests
  • work trials
  • panel interviews
  • collective evaluation
  • technology
  • video interviews
  • AI-based screening
  • soft skills
  • reference checks
  • balanced approach
  • qualifications
  • character
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