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The reason that most people are in debt is the overuse as well as irresponsible use of credit cards. Banks ought to do a background check and only issue credit cards to individuals who have the ability to pay back their debts. What is your opinion?

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I believe that majority of the people are negligent in repaying their credits
therefore
, banks should have to conduct an assessment to check their previous banking history before approving
credit
 cards to individuals. There are plenty of
credit
card
 victims around the world,
although
, most of whom use
credit
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card
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cards
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 for a luxurious life, but their financial capacity or monthly does not hinder
to
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their purchases,
hence
this
 might ​lead to a gigantic economic crisis for the countries.
For example
, in India, some of the banks
near
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to
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closure due to the large
credit
balance
 by the customers. Another side is
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a bank
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bank
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banks
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 providing a huge
credit
card
balance
 to their customers, as well as plenty of
credit
card
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 offers cause people without any supposition to spend money
for
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 gadgets, cars, houses.
For example
, one of my friends who lived the richest life with
credit
 cards
finally
 got caught by the police for months of
due
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 outstanding
balance
. My opinion is that government should put
an
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eligibility criteria for the bank customers and
also
 terminate those merchandise
discount
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 and giant
card
balance
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balances
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 provided by the bank,
nevertheless
, all transactions should be under the government body as a
credit
beuro
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euro
neuro
.
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