Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree ?
Although
over a half of employees
in the company in some developed countries is
women, almost Change the verb form
are
chief
executive officers are men. Some individuals believe that companies should provide the exact number of these high-level positions to Correct quantifier usage
all chief
female
. Fix the agreement mistake
females
This
essay totally disagree
with Change the verb form
disagrees
this
statement because it is gender
discrimination and it also
make
their Change the verb form
makes
employees
burn out.
The primary reason why this
policy should not be taken in any companies
is that everyone should receive equal opportunities to get promoted no matter what their Fix the agreement mistake
company
gender
is. In order to achieve career advancement, employees
should focus on using their dominant and flawless work to be an
evidence of proofing that they deserve to be in a higher position not because of Remove the article
apply
gender
discrimination. To illustrate, the cosmetics company in Bangkok select its chief by evaluating the performance. Therefore
, it is possible for the only man in the company to get into this
position.
The second
main reason why it is unacceptable to distribute a certain percentage of the executive officers to one gender
is that it lessen
the effectiveness of other Change the verb form
lessens
employees
' performance. It cannot be denied that if they know that there are fewer chances for them to get into upper-level positions, they will be no longer show enthusiasm in working and this
leads to worsen
their abilities in working in the future. Change the verb form
worsening
For example
, i
In conclusion, this
essay believe
that the allocation of higher position based on Change the verb form
believes
gender
should not be encouraged because it is unfair to another unselected gender
and it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
lower
the efficiency of other people.Change the verb form
lowers
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