Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree ?

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over a half of

employees

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in the company in some developed countries

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women, almost

chief

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executive officers are men. Some individuals believe that companies should provide the exact number of these high-level positions to

female

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females

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essay totally

disagree

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statement because it is

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discrimination and it

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their

employees

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burn out. The primary reason why

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policy should not be taken in any

companies

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is that everyone should receive equal opportunities to get promoted no matter what their

gender

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is. In order to achieve career advancement,

employees

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should focus on using their dominant and flawless work to be

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evidence of proofing that they deserve to be in a higher position not because of

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discrimination. To illustrate, the cosmetics company in Bangkok select its chief by evaluating the performance.

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, it is possible for the only man in the company to get into

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position. The

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main reason why it is unacceptable to distribute a certain percentage of the executive officers to one

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is that it

lessen

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the effectiveness of other

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' performance. It cannot be denied that if they know that there are fewer chances for them to get into upper-level positions, they will be no longer show enthusiasm in working and

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leads to

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their abilities in working in the future.

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believe

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that the allocation of higher position based on

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should not be encouraged because it is unfair to another unselected

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and

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lower

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the efficiency of other people.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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260 words

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Gender diversity
Affirmative action
Meritocracy
Quotas
Glass ceiling
Legal enforcement
Tokenism
Voluntary measures
Career progression
Representation
Workforce parity
Backlash
Historical imbalances
Corporate governance
Inclusive practices
Boardroom dynamics
Gender norms
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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree ?

Your opinion

In many cities, the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.

Some people say that parents should choose the major\degree for their children to study at universities. Others think that children should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the future people will not need to have schools, galleries, museums or libraries because everything from education to culture and entertainment will be available online. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, an increasing number of children are overweight or obese as a result of eating too much fast food. Banning fast food from school canteens is the best way to fight this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?