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You bought a set of China tea cups from a famous department store, as a Christmas present for your sister. When you reached home, you found that a few cups were broken. You went back to exchange the damaged cups, with the receipt, but the sales executive refused to take them back. • State what problem you had with the purchased item. • Complain about the inability of the sales staff to address the problem. • Describe how you want the store to solve the problem to your satisfaction.

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Hi Manager, The purpose of my writing is to lodge a complaint regarding a no-exchange policy of your delicatessen, which had caused a conflict between your staff member and myself. Yesterday, I purchased a China
tea
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cups
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 set from your store for a Christmas present for my sister. Woefully, it was not cross-checked at the time of billing as the shop was about to shut down, and to my surprise I found it to have cracks only when I reached the residence. The very
next
 morning I approached the same
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 who had done the packing. I delineated the whole situation to him.
However
, the executive is not accepting to reciprocate it even when the bill is available and it was less than 24 hours of purchase. He gave a reason that it is a no-exchange store and
hence
 the goods cannot be exchanged.
Moreover
, he even became cantankerous and started blaming me for the damage. I request you to please consider my concern as I was not aware of the policy and
also
 it was not my fault. I kindly appeal
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 to please replace it with the new cups or else refund the amount to my credit card. Your cooperation in
this
 matter will be greatly appreciated. Regard Anjali Sharma
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