Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

It is argued that
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should provide a significant value on
women
acquiring a higher position because it is usually dominated by men, even though
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of the staff are
females
mostly in richer countries.
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essay agrees with the statement mentioned above because
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equality and some bigger achievement belongs to
women
. As a species, we tend to think that the male invades the world
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being
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dominant, but people should believe in equality because
women
can perform well in the said position.
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is to say that
females
are capable of performing what the opposite gender can do including in
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corporate world
such
as
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in terms of
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situation
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.
For instance
, the late former President Cory Aquino,
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the
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first
female president of the Philippines, as she
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for her country during the 20 years
dictator
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invation
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innovation
, as
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can see in her interviews the dedication and
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strong power of being
a
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a woman
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women
.
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are certain qualities that
females
excell
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means that mostly bigger achievements are ruled by
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women
womens
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women
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like in university, a significant fact is documented that
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females
are the
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who
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in class including sports
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and other
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extra curricular
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activities.
For example
, recent survey data that 80% of the graduates with
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in most
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in Victoria town
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females
,
consequently
they are much prepared for bigger things. In conclusion,
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essay support the idea of
women
should
also
have a seat for
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position because of non-discrimination and huge
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accomplishment
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mostly by
females
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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