Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?
It is argued that
a companies
should provide a significant value on Correct the article-noun agreement
companies
a company
women
acquiring a higher position because it is usually dominated by men, even though half
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the half
percent
of the staff are Change the spelling
per cent
females
mostly in richer countries. This
essay agrees with the statement mentioned above because of
equality and some bigger achievement belongs to Change preposition
apply
women
.
As a species, we tend to think that the male invades the world of
being Change preposition
by
a
dominant, but people should believe in equality because Change the article
apply
women
can perform well in the said position. This
is to say that females
are capable of performing what the opposite gender can do including in a
corporate world Correct article usage
the
such
as a steady and firm decisions
in terms of Correct the article-noun agreement
a steady and firm decision
steady and firm decisions
difficult
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a difficult
situation
. Fix the agreement mistake
situations
For instance
, the late former President Cory Aquino, whom
Correct pronoun usage
who
the
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was the
first
female president of the Philippines, as she fight
for her country during the 20 years Change the verb form
fights
dictator
Change preposition
of dictator
invation
, as Correct your spelling
innovation
it
can see in her interviews the dedication and Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
strong power of being Remove the article
apply
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a woman
women
women
.
Furthermore
, There
are certain qualities that Fix capitalization
there
females
excell
Correct your spelling
excel
.
Change preposition
in.
This
means that mostly bigger achievements are ruled by Correct your spelling
women
womens
like in university, a significant fact is documented that Correct your spelling
women
mostly
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most
females
are the one
who Correct pronoun usage
ones
excel
in class including sportsChange the verb form
excels
,
and other Remove the comma
apply
Correct your spelling
extracurricular
extra curricular
activities. Correct your spelling
extracurricular
For example
, recent survey data that 80% of the graduates with honor
in most Change the spelling
honour
school
in Victoria town Change to a plural noun
schools
was
Change the verb form
were
females
, consequently
they are much prepared for bigger things.
In conclusion, This
essay support the idea of women
should also
have a seat for higher
position because of non-discrimination and huge Add an article
the higher
a higher
accomplishement
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accomplishment
is
mostly by Unnecessary verb
apply
females
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