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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
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The pie charts indicate the percentages of English students at a University in Britain. who were
apply
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 to
other language
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another language
other languages
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in addition
 to English in 2000 and 2010
.
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overall
, about half
percent
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per cent
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 of the students didn't speak
other language
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another language
other languages
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 over the period.
To begin
 with, learners in the university, who just speak
mother
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their mother
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 tongue English decreased steadily from 50% to 45% over ten years.
Moreover
, people who just speak German stayed
rimend
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remind
on
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at
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 10%,
while
 there was
a
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 increase gradually in both
of
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French and Tow other languages by 5
percent
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per cent
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 over a decade.
On the other hand
, there
was
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were
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 disappear completely for people who speak another language in 2010.
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