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You are the manager of a restaurant that has received a letter of complaint about poor service from a member of your staff.

#manager #restaurant #complaint #service #member #staff
My name is Olivia, I am the manager of "Moons", where you went
dinner
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for dinner
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last
 week with your family. I would like to let you know that I am so sorry about your experience with us. Usually, we are more serious in our job, but
this
 night we had a lot of people there and we lose
our
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the
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 quality
in
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of
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 our service. I have decided about
this
 issue with my
employeed
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employed
. Actually, I make about a
decicion
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decision
 about it,
this
employeed
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employee
employees
employed
 don't work here anymore. In our
restaurant
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,restaurant
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 we need the best team to offer the best service to our clients so it
been
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has been
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 a good choice
to
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for
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 everybody. As a symbol of apology, I
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towant
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want
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won't
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 give you a gift for you and three people more. With
this
letter
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,letter
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 I send you a ticket to come to "Moons"
in
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at
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 any moment
eat
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to eat
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 and give us
other
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another
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oportunity
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opportunity
 to enjoy
with
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apply
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us
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ourselves
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.
Also
, I will remember you the letters of complaint from
ours
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our
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costumers
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customers
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 help us to improve our service and offer the best experience possible. Thank you for your time. Regards Manager of "Moons"
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