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Men and women are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right ot exclude males and females form certain professions because of their gender.

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Initially
,
men
 were always stronger and less weak than
women
.
However
, there are many individuals who
suggeste
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suggested
suggest
 that
women
 should have access to all
jobs
 like
men
 and
men
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that men
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 do not have to do some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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certain
jobs
. So ,
this
 essay will
further
 explore
this
thought provoking
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 issue. 
To begin
 with, in the past
women
 did not have permission to do everything
instead
 of
brought
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bringing
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 up children. Meanwhile,
men
 worked in different manufactures for twelve hours
at
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a
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 day .
As a result
 , that caused disastrous consequences. Life expectancy was
in
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at
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 the lowest level ( around 30 years ).
Also
, all
this
labor
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labour
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 did not alleviate situations. People struggled
of
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with
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 famine and were underprivileged. I mean
that
is
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if
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women
 had
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to work as
men
 it would be easier
to
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for
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 every family. Nowadays, we have
prosperous
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a prosperous
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 situation.
Women
 can work in different
jobs
. The average working time
6
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is 6
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hours.
However
, we should separate two types of
jobs
 into two groups. The first group will be more appropriate for
men
. The second group will be more suitable for
women
. It does not mean that we need
exclude
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to exclude
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 males and females from certain professions. It means that we have to make
creteria
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criteria
 for every occupation.
As a result
, ladies and gentlemen will understand does
this
 vocation
relevant
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is relevant
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 or not. By way of conclusion, we do not have to exclude people from
different
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a different
the different
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job
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jobs
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due to
theire
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their
 gender. If everything is fine
then
 let them work.
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