The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006. You should write at least 150 words.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
bar chart depicts the proportion of men and women consuming five or more
portion
Fix the agreement mistake
portions
show examples
of fruit and vegetables in the United Kingdom by
age
category in 2006.  It is clear from the graph that the ratio of females consuming is more than males percentage as we can see.
According to
what is shown, the percentages of middle-aged increased gradually through that period. So, the
age
group 19-24 absorbing almost reached 15 per cent for males and about 16% for females
while
, from 45 to 54 as many as about quarter.
Moreover
, the elderly have a significant increase in the
age
group 55-64 which achieved nearly 35 per cent.
After
this
substantial soar it's have declined in the percentage of the
age
group 65-74 to about 5 per cent and, we can see the ratio of both men and women got the same at
age
75.
To sum up
, we could say that with increasing
age
then
the consumption has grown especially in females.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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