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Your recently visited a store and didn't like the customer service there. Write a complaint letter to the store manager and say -What was the issue there? -Why wasn't the staff helpful? -Suggest what can be done about it

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Dear
the
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manager, I am writing
this
 letter to express my concern about your
store
.
To begin
 with, I recently visited your
store
 to find the perfect gift for my husband as his birthday
gifts
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. My husband is into
a PC games
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a PC game
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 lately,
that is
 why your
store
 is the perfect place
for
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 find the one for him. I was
little
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confusing
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whenI
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when I
when
 entered the
store
 because there were excessive amounts of PC, thereby I could not choose. I was asking for help to find the perfect one to lady at the counter and her attitude was quite aggressive to me. She said that you can find the one by
myself
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. It seems like she did not want to help the customers at all.
In addition
, I saw she was using
smartphone
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while
 she was working and there were some
customer
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 who wanted her help.
Lastly
, in my opinion, there should be
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particular rules or restrictions that
mentioned
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 about customer service. Please consider my suggestions. Yours sincerely,
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