The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The two pie charts compare what and how many languages English students spoke at a university located in England between the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,
Spanish
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the most commonly spoken one in both years.
On the contrary
, the least spoken was the German
language
. It can be seen obviously from the charts that
student
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students
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who
spoken
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spoke
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only
Spanish
in both 2000 and 2010
comprising
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comprised
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the highest percentage of 30% and 35%, respectively. In 2000, the proportion of
person
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people
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using
Spanish
was two times higher than
France-the
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France
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language
that was just making up 15% at
this
time.
Then
, the number of
student
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students
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who spoke
Spanish
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went
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up slightly,
increase
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increasing by
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5% and
reach
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35% in the year 2010.
It
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also
evident that
,
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German was the
language
that was most seldom used at
this
university. Students speaking German stabilised at 10% over the period shown, which was three times lower than those who use
Spanish
.
Besides
, with an increase to 20% from 15% in 2000, those who spoke another
language
became the second largest group in the year 2010.
Submitted by Minh Ngoc on

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Vocabulary: Replace the words spanish, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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