The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two pie charts compare what and how many languages English students spoke at a university located in England between the years 2000 and 2010.

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Spanish

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the most commonly spoken one in both years.

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, the least spoken was the German

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. It can be seen obviously from the charts that

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who

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spoke

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only

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in both 2000 and 2010

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the highest percentage of 30% and 35%, respectively. In 2000, the proportion of

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people

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using

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was two times higher than

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France

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that was just making up 15% at

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time.

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, the number of

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who spoke

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up slightly,

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5% and

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reaching

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35% in the year 2010.

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evident that

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German was the

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that was most seldom used at

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university. Students speaking German stabilised at 10% over the period shown, which was three times lower than those who use

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, with an increase to 20% from 15% in 2000, those who spoke another

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became the second largest group in the year 2010.

Submitted by Minh Ngoc on Fri May 05 2023

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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1 paragraphs

178 words

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