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the line paragraph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburg, two cities in the UNITED Kingdom. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

First of all, it is apparent from the graph supplied information about the daily maximum weather for two cities in New Zealand (Auckland and Christchurch), and two cities in the United Kingdom (London and Edinburgh). Primarily, the graph showed there are enormous changes in the warmth in the middle of the year which is in June & July for both countries. As can be seen from the graph, a fifth Celsius is the highest condition in London on average between June & July, where Edinburgh is only 5-celsius degrees lower than London in the same month,
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 it is the most blistering climate in Edinburgh. Later, these two cities in New Zealand have dramatic cold changes in the middle of the year. In reverse from United Kindom, Auckland and Christchurch has the lowest climate in June & July, it is 15 Celsius and 10 Celsius, respectively.
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, the lowest temperature in New Zealand is not as low as in the United Kingdom. It can be concluded, the weather here is warmer.

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