Most high level positions in companies are filled by men eventhough the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50%female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain % of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Gender inequality in
workplace
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the workplace
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has been the recent
debates
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globally. Some people say that higher positions should just be reserved for
men
while
others are saying the opposite. In my opinion,
women
should
also
be allowed to lead a
company
.
Women
are always attributed as the right hand of
men
.
However
, they
also
do contribute to the society
as well as
the workplace.
Firstly
, they have good organisational skills which
some
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most
men
are lacking.
Women
tend to be more strategic with
regards
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regard
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to their daily routines.
For example
, they list down all the tasks that they need to do for the day compared to
men
who seldom
does
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it and sometimes even
hires
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an assistant just to prepare his
day to day
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schedule.
Secondly
, females are very patient with everything. They seldom complain
of
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the tasks being thrown at them.
For instance
, mothers who are housewives
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all the household chores without thinking twice. They never care
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their tiredness as long as they do their job.
However
, there are
few
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drawbacks as well. Females tend to be weaker
on
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decision making
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.
Women
usually use their
heart
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when doing their decisions
thus
resulting
to
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indecisiveness.
On the other hand
, males
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been dominating almost all workforces. They are brilliant
with
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being abrupt
decision makers
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. They stand on what they believe in no matter what the consequences will be. They are
also
strict with all the standards and policies of the
company
they are leading. They seldom break the rules that they have formulated. But,
men
could
also
be the downfall of a
company
as they are prone to using their power to bully
his
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subordinates. Lots of companies nowadays, especially in Phillippines are complaining to the Department of Labour regarding
power
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tripping of their male boss
thus
affecting their performance at work. In conclusion,
women
should
also
be given a chance to be in a higher level of a
company
as
they
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very caring, patient and most importantly as knowledgeable as their opposite sex.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • workforce
  • mandatory quotas
  • tokenism
  • diversity in leadership
  • stereotypes
  • work-life balance
  • mentorship programs
  • flexible working conditions
  • maternity leave policies
  • holistic approach
  • cultural shift
  • sustainable gender equality
  • barriers to advancement
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