The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
The following illustration depicts the
percentage
of two sexes in
UK
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the UK
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that daily consume five or more portions of
fruits
and
vegetables
in 2006. There are 7 seven
age
groups of
people
illustrated on the bar chart.
Overall
, we observe that the highest amount of
fruits
and
vegetables
have been eaten by females.
Also
, the least amount of plant-based food
are
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is
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consumed by
people
that are aged 19-24. And the highest
percentage
have
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been eaten by English
people
that are aged 55-64.
Due to
this
reason, we can see
upward
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trend between
two
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the two
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age
groups, which are 19-24 and 55-64, and after
slight
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a slight
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decrease in percentages of consumed fruit and
vegetables
. Young
people
that were 19-24, ate about 15% each.
Female
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Females
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consumed slightly more
fruits
and
vegetables
than males. We observe
slight
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decrease in the next
age
group which is 25-34. Men ate 20% and women almost a quarter.
People
that are 35-44 years old ate even more
percentage
of plants, which was almost a quarter in males
diet
and exactly 25% in females
diet
. Females that are aged 45-54 ate more
that
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25% of
fruits
and
vegetables
, but males'
percentage
remained constant. Both genders reached a peak of consuming more
plant based
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food at the
age
of 55-64.
Fruits
and
vegetables
made up about 35% of the
diet
of
middle aged
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women. And men ate almost 30% of the same
diet
. After we can observe
downward
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a downward
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trend
,
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because both genders started eating less
of
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plant based
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plant-based
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food when they got older.
Female
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A female
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that
are
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aged 65-74 ate about 30% of fruit and
vegeatables
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vegetables
, and men ate almost 30%. English
people
that are aged 75 ate the same amount of fruit and
vegetables
which was 25%.
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