the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.

the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.
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Given is the bar chart comparing the proportions of
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sports (basketball, cycling, football, swimming, and hockey) of men and women ages
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18 to 20.
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, the initial impression from the chart is that more females were interested in swimming and cycling,
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basketball, football, and cycling attracted
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more males. Another interesting highlight is that hockey is the least common sport in both genders. In terms of football, nearly 50% of males preferred to play it as
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to females at roughly 15%.
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, the percentage of male basketball players was almost 35% which is around three times that of female players (more than 11%). In hockey, the figure for boy players was around 11%, higher than that for girls by 7%. Moving on to the remaining categories, cycling was the most enjoyable sport of all genders which accounted for exactly 40% of females and more than 35% of males. Meanwhile, nearly 35% of women chose swimming as
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sport, which was strongly more than exactly 20% of men who preferred swimming.
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