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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie chart Illustrates the number of
english
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 speaking
students
 who
speaks
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 other languages
in
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an
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 university in
england
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, in the period
of
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between
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 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, many
students
 spoke Spanish compared to other languages in both of the years.
To begin
, the
students
 were able to
Communicate
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 in another language at 15%. it was slightly increased to 20%. There was
similar
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 in who used to speak
other language
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another language
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 at 10% and few
persons
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people
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 were speaking in
english
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 rather than another language has been decreased from 20% to 10%.
whereas
,
who
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 were familiar only with French slowly declined from 15% to 10%.
Moreover
,
a
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 least number of folks used only garman stayed at the same level at 10%. Approximately,
one third
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 of
students
 were talking in Spanish than other languages, which grew dramatically from 30% to 35% in 2010.
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