The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
The bar data illustrates the percentage of both genders eating five or more
portion
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of fruit and vegetable per day in the UK by
age
group in 2006.
Overall
, the chart shows that the
age
group from 55-64 consumed the highest portion of food
while
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19 to 24 years old takes the least at about 15%. In more
details
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, from 19 to 24 the consumption of the said substance was about 15% for both
female
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and
male
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.
Furthermore
, we can see
the
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steady increase in consumption
while
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they get older.
Moreover
, it reaches its highest peak from 55-64 years old at around 30% before experiencing a sudden decrease of at least 10% when they reached the
age
of 75.
Moreover
, from the
age
of 35 to 54 the fraction of nutrient consumption
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male
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remains steady at around 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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