The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar data illustrates the percentage of both genders eating five or more
portion
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portions
age
group in 2006.
Overall
, the chart shows that the age
group from 55-64 consumed the highest portion of food while
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19 to 24 years old takes the least at about 15%.
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, it reaches its highest peak from 55-64 years old at around 30% before experiencing a sudden decrease of at least 10% when they reached the age
of 75.
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